Comment on my poems :D

[Shole]

One of these days the clocks will stop
One of these days it will be your stop
One of these days I will be waiting for you
Its easy for everyone to say
You never knew pain
You always got a way
But one of these days my heart stopped
It stopped to beat
One of these days I forgot to love
One of those days I killed myself
Its easy for me to say
I will never feel the same way
But one of these days
I meet you
Oh what couldnt you do
You made it alright
You made it true
And one of those days my heart played that long lost beat
Easy for you to do
To make me fall in love with you
One of these days you made me happy
One of these days you made love we

Written By Srdjan Solkotovic(Shole)

Hi we got a good thing
And i want to be you man
But will I see you tomorrow again
Now tell me
Do you want to love me for ever
Or am I just another hit and run
Now is it a real thing
Or is just one day
Now you and me
Thats special and you know it
I see you push me on the wall
Kiss me slow
Let me feel your body
Just make me go crazy
Make me want you
Drag me to the bed
Let me take over
Get into your head
Let me make you go wild
Kiss you from side to side
Teas you so hard you wont stand it anymore
I wanna heal your heart and your soul
I wanna hear you moan
I want to feel that i am close to something real
I want to belong to you
I think i am falling for you
Dont know what to do
My mind is taking over
And it wants only you
I found something I wanted all along
Something I belong
And I belong to you
Because…I love you ♥


So what do you guys and girls think

 

[Nebulous's iconNebulous]

Pretty good, is this dedicated to your girlfriend?

 

[DrLeftover]

Another poet.

Damn.

I'm jealous.

 

[Bea Sunny (:]

Very good I like it.

 

[Shole]

Pretty good, is this dedicated to your girlfriend?

Yup to my ex gf. I have new once but for my gf and i dont publish them. I might write some new soon when time allows me.
Thanks Bea
And yeah i am a poet but i like writing stories more then poems

 

[Jazzy]

Very good and I enjoyed them very much. Thank you for sharing these!

 

[Shole]

Should I share more?

 

[Bea Sunny (:]

Should I share more?

Yes why not.