Edit 5-7-2013: Sorry guys, but this is part of a discontinued work that I have no plans now on finishing, let alone releasing. All of my future work will be posted on my website.
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My Unnamed Piece of Work (caution language)
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You must be a VERY quick reader, theez.
Why thank you J, for making us buy the full version.
Jaosals said:
Why thank you J, for making us buy the full version.
Currently up to chapter 5 and I started in mid-august, and the chapters are about the same length so, if I can pick it up again, I'll have made relatively good-timing. Thanks, btw.
Have fun getting it published.
Nice dialogue, and by that I mean it's decently formatted.
Just one thing; you don't have to narrate every bloody thing the character does...detail is good, but your reader does not need to hear it all. Try to variate the way you start your paragraphs as well. I noticed that most of the time you do alright with that, but careful with repetition and boring your reader.
Your beginning needs to be totally captivating, because it's the first thing people read, apart from maybe a random page, the blurb, the foreword, or if you're like me, the end of the book. It needs to hook your reader from that first point.
Nice dialogue, and by that I mean it's decently formatted.
Just one thing; you don't have to narrate every bloody thing the character does...detail is good, but your reader does not need to hear it all. Try to variate the way you start your paragraphs as well. I noticed that most of the time you do alright with that, but careful with repetition and boring your reader.
Your beginning needs to be totally captivating, because it's the first thing people read, apart from maybe a random page, the blurb, the foreword, or if you're like me, the end of the book. It needs to hook your reader from that first point.
