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The Gods

Dennis

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It's a poem i wrote...



He stood there in the fading morning

Watching ships out by the bay

The ships they swayed and watched him too

Reeling in their pay

And all they heard, felt, or smelled was all thought to be true

The Gods, they laughed, and watched him watch the ships that watched him too.
 
Interesting twist at the end with the poetic irony and begs the question who is watching the Gods. I can sense a tinge of existentialist thought in the preceding line: all they heard, felt, or smelled was all thought to be true.



I'm interested as to why you omitted the sense of sight and mentioned the other senses (sound, touch, smell), especially as there is a lot of watching going on. It is so clever that I have to ask: was this intentional?



I enjoyed this poem. Good to see you back, Dennis.
 
Fatal Dawn said:
Interesting twist at the end with the poetic irony and begs the question who is watching the Gods. I can sense a tinge of existentialist thought in the preceding line: all they heard, felt, or smelled was all thought to be true.



I'm interested as to why you omitted the sense of sight and mentioned the other senses (sound, touch, smell), especially as there is a lot of watching going on. It is so clever that I have to ask: was this intentional?



I enjoyed this poem. Good to see you back, Dennis.



Thanks for the positive feedback. To be brutally honest, i wasn't even aware that i left out sight...although it worked out quite nicely, must have been a Freudian slip
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Yeah i just finished 'The Stranger' and i'm on the big existentialist question, so this poem was definitely inspired.
 
Short and right to the point. Loved this poem, and thank you for sharing it.
 
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